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I really need help with my action scenes, so if anyone would be willing to read through this battle scene and let me know their thoughts please do. This is an actual scene from my book, so I want to get it right before publishing my book.
Wasting no time, Hosea pulled on his chain-mail shirt and pulled his royal purple hoodie on over it. He strapped his metal arm-guards on his wrists. Filled his quiver full of razor sharp arrows, put his short sword into the quiver, and strapped it, and his bow to his back. He tied his dual wield swords to his waist, and his long sword just under one of the dual wields. He grabbed his dagger and sheathed it on his thigh. Finally grabbing his helmet and pulling it down to his chin.
Outside the tent the camp was chaos. People were sprinting to get their gear and get to the field, and each one stopped and parted way for Hosea as he walked forward. Someone fell into pace with him after a little bit. "What are we up against sir?" the voice of his best friend Seth asked, from a little behind him.
"According to reports it's the whole of the Rothe army," Hosea replied.
"Sounds fun," Seara's voice sounded from Hosea's other side. She was walking right in pace with Seth. They walked out side of the camp to where the troops were gathering in the open field. As the marched up the hill side the troops parted way for them. Cresting the hill revealed billions of soldiers across the field from them. They were easily out numbered, a hundred to one.
Hosea bit his lip in anger and frustration. "This isn't just Rothe," he fumed. Seara glanced at him curiously.
"Sir?" she asked.
"Rothe and Ethor have joined forces. They have numbers, weapons, tactitions, skill, and mages," he couldn't help but feel a bit of panic rising in his chest. They might not walk away from this battle alive. They could negotiation terms of surrender, but he knew General Kara wouldn't allow that. If they were to make it out of this alive they would have to escape through the tunnels below them.
Hosea noticed that his troops were shifting uneasily behind him. They were realizing how bad this situation was as well. He turned to look at them, letting his gaze sweep across them. He couldn't think of any encouraging words. The situation was bad, he knew it, they knew it, the enemy knew it.
"Sir, I think they wish to talk," Seth whispered leaning in. He was still facing the field. Hosea turned back to see four people walking out towards the middle of the field. They stopped, not far from their troops. One of the people raised their arm up. Hosea's eyes widened. "FALL BACK!" he ordered, raising his voice so it reached the whole of his army. His army reacted instantly, pulling back.
Not a moment later, boulders the size of large wagons, rained down on them. Soldiers were flung everywhere, rock bits slung out in all directions, the earth shook, and Hosea was knocked to the ground. The shaking stopped, and the onslaught of boulders stopped as well. Hosea slowly pushed himself up. His soldiers were coming out of their hiding spots, medical teams pulling the wounded off the field already.
A glare crossed Hosea's face. "We start the attacks around here, not them," he jumped to his feet, and turned to his men. Pulling his dagger out of it's sheath he raised it into the air. "Stand and fight with me!" His battle cry ringing around the clearing. Soldiers raised their weapons and cheered. All the way at Kara's section a cheer could be heard, and down at Helldor's section the war cry could also be heard.
Turning on heel, Hosea charged out into open field. As he ran he switched his dagger for his long sword. Seth fell into pace next to him, his own long sword out. Giving him a look, as they ran they shared a silent conversation. A portion of the army in front of them surged forward. Hosea's crystal necklace began to glow, as did Seth's blue eyes, and time slowed. All except Hosea and Seth, they continued forward, with time being all but stopped. Just as they reached the front line, time returned to normal. A wave of arrows rained down on the enemy soldiers coming from the archer line behind Hosea and Seth.
They clashed with the first line, cutting through them with ease, not even seconds after they reached the front line, the rest of Hosea's soldiers clashed with the front line.
Hosea had practically buried himself in enemy soldiers. If to many got to close, he would slow time and fix that. Out of the corner of his eye he could see Seara easily fighting off three soldiers. Kicking one in the chest, blocking a blade with her sword, and catching another's arm, all seemingly at the same time. On his other side, Seth was also using his time slowing abilities. It looked like he was teleporting around the field. Fighting in one spot then being in another.
The first portion of the enemy army began pulling back. As they did, Hosea called for his men to push forward. They made a push forward, forcing the soldiers of Rothe and Ethor to pull back even more. Hosea called for them to push forward some more. The first line of enemy soldiers withdrew to the rest of the army, and instantly Hosea called for his men to pull back.
He waited until he was the last person before pulling back. He grabbed an injured soldier on his way. They reached the front of camp and the medical teams came out, taking any injured and retreating again. Some of the injured from the boulder attack came back out.
Breathing hard, Hosea looked back across the field, Helldor's section of the army had already taken Hosea's place. Kara's section was no where to be seen on the field. Though Helldor wasn't being pushed back yet, he wasn't making progress. After a few minutes Helldor pulled back as well. The enemy soldiers began advancing again. Neither Hosea or Helldor went out to push them back. They stood at the ready. Hosea with his arm raised, ready to give the order to the archers.
"General," Seara spoke. "They're getting awfully close." Hosea didn't respond, his eyes fixed on a point across the field.
"General Hosea," Seth spoke this time. "Half their army is almost to us." Some of his soldiers were moving back and forth, getting impatient. The enemy soldiers were more than halfway across the field now. "Sir, what are you waiting for?" Seth sounded panicked.
Then the ground started shaking, the whole field shook, and the ground under the enemy soldier's feet began sinking. An entire half of the field collapsed, taking the half of the enemy army down with it. "Fire!" Hosea shouted, dropping his arm. A wave of arrows were loosed on the field, and coming up from the ground was Kara and her section of the army.
Helldor had his section flanking to the right, and Hosea moved his to flank left. The other half of the enemy army was moving in to help their people. Hosea and his men got in the way. They were in the most dangerous spot at the moment. In the middle of the enemy army. Though the half behind them was busy recovering from a fall and fending off Kara's section of the army.
With Hosea and his men in between the two halves of the army, the half not currently fighting actually stopped. As if unsure of whether or not they should try to fight these people. A battle cry suddenly went up from behind the half facing Hosea's men. Helldor and his men were now behind them. The catapults the the enemy had were torn down and rendered useless.
"NOW!" Hosea ordered, and he and his men charged again.
If you made it this far please let me know what you thought. I know it was a long post but I really would love help on it.
