I was thinking that she'd be bitter that he hadn't come to save her. As well as, when he would come to take her back, it would be YEARS later and she had been set free long before then. She had looked for them because she wanted to find her father again to tell him that she was alive and alright. (Probably like Bell from Beauty and the Beast when he lets her go because her father is sick. I think Pan will do something of the sort to her.) And she'll come back because she wants to and because she needs to.
Ooh I like that
If you ever need editing or more feedback, just ask! I'm always happy to help! (and also procrastinate my own writing by doing other writing stuff like helping other writers or hanging out on the forums here lol)
Oops, sorry. I'm kinda late, but your story seems really good! I especially like how she is bitter idea and I third the idea that the guy is humbled too. I think you should really develop her relationships with the other lost boys so they aren't just thrown to the side when you write more (later in the story). Good luck with your writing :D
OOH YES I LIKE THE IDEA OF HAVING HER BE BEST FRIENDS WITH ALL THE BOYS
ROWAN AND HER BOYS
(petition for a name change?) lol jk don't do that
YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSS (and if it's really not appealing, I can change it. But I like it.)
I'm so invested in this story now lol
Lmao
WARNING: A BIT OF SELF ADVERTISING WILL INSUE!
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https://archiveofourown.org/works/14267499/chapters/32907366
