forum Please critique my universe! :)

Started August 10, 2018 by Deleted user

tune

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I'd love the help, beacuse I'm relativley new to this, so sorry if it sucks.

Hi! Your universe seems very good! I would love to know more but it seems to be lacking a proper description. The history part seems well thought and sorta acts like a description in its own way. Also, I think you should add more to the magic system as that is a very interesting part. Maybe add why its like that or maybe a character who has gone through that choosing. Or maybe add the process of how they are chosen? It seems that you have thought it out well, now you just have to put it into words! I hope that helped a bit!

@captian-universe haha yeah, I accidentially deleted my description and haven't rewritten it. Thank you for your input!!!its super helpful

I'd love to know more about its history as captain universe said. How are spouses and jobs chosen? Why only one child per couple? What does the world look like physically? What kind of clothes do the people in your universe wear? Things like that. Interested to see what you come up with!!

cool thanks! i will write that!