forum I need help making a song and having lyrics in it

Started April 24, 2020 by Deleted user

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Any help?

I have one line done:
"You're the savior we need, but you work for the devil."

What's the song about? What's the rhyme scheme like?

I don't know, yet

Hmm. Well, a start would definitely be knowing that. I don't think just throwing yourself into song-writing will help you any. After all, you're still telling a story nevertheless. And people who tell stories don't write because they want to tell a story, they write because they have a story to tell.

Wait, I have it.
It's a song about rebelling

Now, who's the one rebelling? The one telling the story? Or the one the story is being told about (the "you")?

They're rebelling against the people in charge, and the one telling the story is a rebel

And people who tell stories don't write because they want to tell a story, they write because they have a story to tell.

This is hella inspirational

Thanks, Ash.

They're rebelling against the people in charge, and the one telling the story is a rebel

Okay. What exactly is important about this rebellion? What happens that makes it important to be remembered? What feels are going around? What is the setting like? Why was this "you" person so important?

They're trying to make the world a better place, There's felling of anger. The setting is apocalyptic, and the reason why they were important is because they were the leader of the rebellion

Interesting. Though I do have a few things to ask:

People try to make the world a better place everyday. Almost none of them really stand out or have a name. So what makes this different? What exactly was so bad about what they're rebelling against that it will make the world a better place? Are there any other feelings? Why are they angry? How did the setting get to be the way it did? How does the rebel feel about it? Why did the "you" person leave?

Their government (the thing they're rebelling against) is corrupt to the point that North Korea seems awesome in comparison. No one knows how. Who wouldn't be angry if their government was more corrupt that North Korea's?
They want to fix it. The person didn't leave, they died for their cause.

I see. Well, I'll ask this. How has said corruption affected the rebel? There have to be people not against it, so why is the rebel against it? What exactly makes the government mentioned worse than North Korea? Since you listed no other feelings, I'll assume the rebel is angry at everything, including the death of the other. Is that correct?