forum Critique my universe?

Started May 16, 2018 by @GravyHoney

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My only thing would be: is it in water? If so, how can it have the same laws of physics as on land? And its slightly unrealistic: you never have to do anything? Just sit there and be like ‘I want a burger’ and it appears? You’d have to take that into account as well.

Like @TurtleOfFreedom, I'm a little confused about what the actual geography of the world is. Is it a land surrounded by the Ever Ocean, or is it that the people in this universe live on the land under water, in biodestic buildings or something? I like the idea and you seem to have a good start on the characters, I just think that you need to add a little more info to the actual content of the world. Maybe add a little about culture in the world.

I think this is very interesting, and a unique concept, but like @doug i'm a little confused about where the world actually lies. Is it like an island? or does it fall more into the area of atlantis, for example, like an underwater universe/city? And I'd like to see a little more expansion on the 'all providing' aspect.
I do love this idea though, and I think it is very interesting and intriguing, definitely something I'd like to read about!

oooh I should have made this more clear in the description so this is on me and I gave the land a very unfortunate name. Ever Ocean is actually a floating island, it's not in the ocean. I really should rename it. And @TurtleOfFreedom, I also should have made this clear but when I said ever providing, I meant the rulers of the island use their magic to provide the materials needed for making food. I'm so sorry for the confusion

Oh! Now that you’ve clarified, it makes perfect sense. Just remember to add that into your writing so readers don’t et confused. Good luck!

Thank you!