forum Need help with my characters

Started January 16, 2018 by @childoftheuniverse

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my characters need serious help

How so?

one of my characters can't decide if she has feelings for another and the other has no idea…how would you go about writing this?

Personally, if she were to have feelings for person #2, I would make the oblivious one say something that would make the girl totally trip up in her head and suddenly realize that she's liked person #2 all along.
Humorous example:
Hannah's jaw dropped as she recognized the boy standing in line in front of her. It was Josh! Questions immediately filled her head, such as why he was there in the ice cream shop with her, why the brown haired boy was standing right in front of her. She awkwardly tapped his shoulder, and watched as he turned around.
"Hannah! Good to see you!" he said, smiling.
"Yeah, good to see you too! So… do you know what flavor of ice cream you're getting?" I asked, trying to break the silence.
"Uh, yeah. Chocolate." HOLY CRAP I'M IN LOVE WITH JOSH-

That sort of thing. If it's the other way around, I would have her be slightly relieved at her mistake and continue on as if nothing had happened.

thats super good…thanks for the insight!

Glad to have helped :)