forum Book Critiques?

Started July 16, 2018 by @bonjourhumans

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I need a couple people to read and critique my book….anyone up for it?

https://www.wattpad.com/story/134677097-run?utm_source=web&utm_medium=email&utm_content=share_myworks

There's the website….it's on Wattpad (in case you didn't notice) so I think you should be able to access it easily….idk

Thanks my dudes!

I’ll read it give me a few minutes to get back to you

First chapter was super rushed and confusing, to many scene changes for my brain to handle.

Quite a bit of spelling errors, really cringy (sorry) but it’s really hard to get through

I’ll do it!

Sorry I cannot finish this, but cute kid and cute boy and nice interaction

Would have been better if more thought out with more details

The chapters are a little long. It seems like they are explaining one thing too much. The fact that her mom came and took her in the first chapter seems a little weird since there was no logical reason she would come there. But it’s rwally nice so far