Sorry to dump so many characters on y'all, but the last two feedback sessions have really helped me improve (@CinnamonRoll- you are a godsend!!) so I'd love it if anyone would critique this next character. This one is not one of my stronger ones and needs a lot of improvement, so don't hold back with your comments! Rip him apart if you need to. Thanks!
AHHHH THANK YOU!!! I love your characters!! :DDD
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Your characters just keep getting better! Through the personality page, everything seems to be in order. One thing: you say that he is motivated to be better, yet all the traits listed are ~against~ that. Just add a couple things he's trying to do better and then everything works perfectly!
Okay, you mention all these paranoid traits, but then his backstory doesn't explain much of that. You also mentioned that he doesn't like to talk about his past, so I was expecting something big, but nothing seemed abnormal. Add something to explain that paranoia/insecurity and the backstory will seem much more stable!
Overall? DEFINITELY a good character. Personality is really well-developed, and if you prop it up with backstory, I think that everything will fall into place!!
Hope this helps!! :DDD