forum Would you be so kind as to critique my baby boy?
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Amstance

ok, I love your character Amore. He sounds like a cinnamon roll and i love all the detail you put into making him. i have no critiques on your character and really just wanted to say your character is very well developed you did a good job

@IconicUsername

I'm not a giant give critiques person because I'm afraid of being hypocritical but I'll give it a shot. :)

1) Flaws:

Amore's flaws are super broad. You mention his flaw is anxiety, but you don't explain why this is his flaw, you just provide triggers for his anxiety. Does this make him extremely paranoid? Is he distrusting of people? If his flaw is anxiety because this makes it more difficult to interact with people, then you should connect the two.

2) Background:

I love that he's Italian! Mainly because I love all Italian characters, but I love it nonetheless. Where does he live now? You never clarify if he's still in Italy or he's moved to America or another English speaking country. If he's still in Italy, him not being able to speak English well is irrelevant considering he doesn't really need to. If he's in America (or another English speaking country), how does he adapt to a country that mainly speaks in English? How does it affect him? Is he proud of his Italian heritage? Embarrassed?

Besides that, I love your character. It's fantastically well written, and there is obviously so much thought that went into it.

@UniverseRose53

Your character is great I think that they should have a little more personality like what are his emotional bonds and things like that 😉