forum Would a few people please give a critique?
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@AloeVera groupMentallyImInACottage

Heyo! Happy to help critique

-Looks
Just a quick note here; it might help to specify what color her skin tone is. Though it's "Light", that can often be mistranslated as light of any color.

-Nature
How long has she been training in archery and flying/arial combat? If she is reckless and disregards the opinions/emotions of others, how could it never lead to a bad situation? It sounds like an accident waiting to happen. She only seems to care for herself, but has a humble motivation, which can be slightly conflicting, however I think you can still pull it off because this is her personal behavior versus her overall character, so as long as you take that into consideration you can still work with that!

-Social
While she's Anti-Supreme, she could still have a Pro-Something political standpoint. Who does she think should replace the Supreme? What's her occupation now? Runaway? Why are those favorite things her favorite things?

-History
What qualifies as advanced education? A lot just happened in the history, but there are a lot of questions. What are the Supremes? Why do they have power to cast out other races? What are Soul-Eaters and what are they capable of? What was slave-life like? What is Evenlee's Ring capable of? Why is she searching for it? Why is it hidden?

-Family
All I can ask for this is what is a Wolvic?

Overall she's got a very fun personality and I love her! This story seems very interesting