forum Will someone critique this sub character for me?
Started by Lydia
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@CWTurtleOfFreedom

He’s a bit light for his body description, age, and height. I might add on 5-20 pounds?

Okay this protaganist is legit amazing you have managed to take a morally not-so-great person and make me love him and want him to beat whatever he’s up against in a character form.

So I’m guessing that the ‘not important’ was pretty much a ‘can’t think of one’? I don’t know the character like you do, so I can’t decide mannerisms and such, but a couple common ones are tapping fingers/feet, biting lip, rubbing neck, resting head on hand, etc.

@CW-BornConfuzzledLeftILoveYa

His hairstyle IS important,and so are his mannerisms. An expensive food is caviar,and it would be nice if you could inclue a picture. I am having a REALLY hard time envisioning him. Hope this helps. :)

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i have a few things!!
his weight is still too low for a 6'7" guy with a lot of muscle, i'd suggest looking at height/weight charts and choosing one a little higher?
depending on what the time/setting of the story is, his education level would vary.
his hairstyle is also important! it says a lot about his character. if he has a buzz cut, we might assume that he doesn't really care about his hair or that he doesn't wanna take care of it, etc. if it's longer he might seem more elegant or self-absorbed?? it also fleshes out the design, so
also idk if this is just me but i can't tell if he's already rich and want to get richer or if he doesn't have the money yet and is working on it
really good character tho, he really stands out :^)