forum Will Critique Villains! (OPEN)

Started August 14, 2018 by @WriteOutofTime

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Rules: Post one character at a time, let me critique that character, and then post another if you wish. I'm not going to be mean, but my critiques are usually really honest, so prepare for that. I'll do my best to be in depth and help you create awesome villains/antagonists!

I would love to have you critique my antagonists! :) Small problem is that I haven't made their character pages yet, but I will post one when I do (if this thread is still open for business).

Lol. Okay, just shoot me a link whenever they're ready. I'd enjoy critiquing your antagonists (although I can't imagine they'd need much critiquing…they're probably great).

Same here. I have an antagonist whose story makes her look like she was intended to be the hero, so I really want her critiqued, but her profile is rather sparse at the moment.

Let me know when she's ready, and I'll be happy to look her over :)

Queen Genevieve: Genevieve Brayen Everlest

I'll admit, I was procrastinating against critiquing your character because she's amazingly well developed and I don't have many critiques to offer. After brainstorming, I managed to come up with at least a few tips:

1. What is the protagonist like? Do you want the reader to root for the protagonist, or does it not matter to you? What you risk with such an understandable character like Queen Genevieve is that there is no reason to not cheer for her. She could easily carry the story as the protagonist, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. It's just something to consider.
2. It also seems like a good therapist/a long talk with Genevieve would be enough to shake her motivation and convince her to stop killing people. Like maybe a devoted lover or a close friend could convince her to stop. Is she really that much of a threat? What makes her truly dangerous?
3. I love her backstory, but I wish it had already been finished. I'm not quite understanding her character yet since I don't know why/how she became who she is today. Her backstory is very in depth and detailed as well, which is definitely a good thing, but I hope you've done the same for your protagonist.

Overall, she's a very solid character who you've clearly spent a lot of time on! Most of my critiques were kind of subjective, but I hope I helped at least a little.

Thank you so much! Sorry for not completing her backstory before asking you to critique. I have a lot of plot points in my head I just haven't written them all down in a way that makes sense yet. I can let you know when it's finished if you would like. Let's just say the arc for her character in the backstory is learning she doesn't have to fit the mold her parents have set for her, but then after a betrayal and major tragedy she fills herself into that mold and tries to completely destroy her individuality. Yes, all of the main characters have developed backstories, but thanks for the tips! I have been considering having her go from main antagonist to anti hero later on in the story, but I haven't decided yet. Thanks so much once again!