forum who wants to critique (boss mode,, very hard,,,,) my oc

Started April 05, 2019 by @icecubes

tune

its very confusing and a lot of tabs you need to disregard,,,, like the aloe one,,,,,, and some of my previous,, its also super fucking long so you will need a lotta time thank u so much i love all of you

ok i think you did a rlly thorough job w all this, however:

-idk if i'm right but i'm p sure psychopaths don't feel anxiety because they lack any kind of empathy. also, they don't feel love. they may want to be loved, but everything they do is strictly related to getting their own needs met. that means no relationship they will ever have cannot be healthy, and i want you to make sure you make that clear when you describe his dynamic with others, like with jean. that relationship is definitely very selfish and he may act caring but not because he cares, mostly just because he still wants to be given attention. also take care not to romanticize it Creepypasta style cuz that is just wrong and gets cringy real quick. just like, do a lot of research.

other than that i think this is a really interesting character!

also
"…and freckles spilled upon his cheeks like a bundle of stars, faded and forever shining"

that fuckin ended me man that's good writing

thank u my very good sir i mucho appreciate! also yeah,,, psychopaths dont have emotions and i've been trying to figure that out LMFAO

also thank you haha

npnp