forum Want to critique this character please?
Started by @Reblod flag
tune

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@CWTurtleOfFreedom

I think she’s really good. However, you describe her as having “vigour, anger, passion, patience and wisdom,” and those 5 things don’t usually go hand-in-hand, but if you can make it work, go for it! Also, you say she has no emotion, and yet she has a temper, which isn’t really possible unless she feels emotion, and she is patient but has no tolerance for certain things.
Besides that, I think she is a really well-rounded character, and will be great in whatever position you put her in in a story.

@Reblod flag

Ah yes I was thinking that when I wrote it down. I made it conflicting on purpose to help muddle her character up a bit if that makes sense. Probably not but it works well enough in the story.
And I didn't explain the no emotion part + temper bit properly. She doesn't feel but still reacts to things like she does and she's very human for a hybrid so it makes her reactions stronger. It's easier to say, she was angry than saying, she seemed angry or something.

Thank you for the critique! I'll fix these things. I tend to miss out on a lot I've noticed