forum Uh, critique my character?

Started February 06, 2018 by @Paperok

tune

Maybe?

Okay, let's start from the top. I like how you describe his looks, though I am curious why the birthmark on his toe is relevant. What kind of gestures does he use when he talks? There are many ways people use their hands when they talk, you can go into a bit more detail here, I think it would be cool. Why does he feel the need to fit in with the others? Is it because he was a lab experiment? Why was he a lab experiment anyway? I feel perhaps it would make more sense if I was able to read up on the Universe. Is his only motivation trying to fit in with this group? How did he even meet them? Why did he get out of the virtual simulation about 3 years ago? There's still a lot of questions that seem unanswered, you can easily answer them throughout the story which is good! But, I still feel like pieces are missing for me to understand who he is as a character.

Thanks, Clearly I need to fill in the holes. Ill do that.