forum Thoughts on my character so far?
Started by Sandra Renee Melton
tune

people_alt 8 followers

@WriteOutofTime

Okay! Here we go.

I like how his name is so common at first glance, but his middle name adds interest. idk why, little things like that are just so cool to me. I'm not sure what you mean by hero/protagonist villain. how can someone be both a hero and a villain? is he a hero to some and a villain to others? why?

His appearance could be more detailed. you say someone else does his hair? well, how do they do it? is it long, short, spiky, curly? how long is his beard? is it a full beard or more of a stubbly look? I love the explanation on his body type.

Mannerisms and motivations feel very well thought out. good job on that. Flaws are pretty solid as well. however, I don't understand how he has no prejudices. everyone's got some. since he's a main character you really need to figure out at least one prejudice. personality type is very bare. mischievous how? when does he brood and why? what makes him angry? how does he calm down? do people like him? is he funny, friendly, stupid?

The explanation on relgion is well done. but, uh…if he's a prince and future king, he's got to have SOME sort of political leaning. there's no way he's completely uninvolved. if he is, that's a serious flaw that should be listed among the flaws, and then maybe add hatred towards politicians and court into his prejudices. idk, just an idea. everything else in this section is fine. i'm also very interested in the concept of a soul sword. that's a cool idea!

background is wayyyyy too short. give us some insight into his character. what a background should be is everything important that happens leading up to the beginning of the actual story. so his childhood, his upbringing, his relationships, etc. anything that made him the way he is now should be listed. like, one big question: how did he even get banished?

I absolutely love his pets. dragons and cats are my favorites lol.

good job and good luck :D