So I am looking for character critique, modified one of my characters excessively and I don’t feel comfortable with her for some reason. I feel like I screwed her up some how; anyway I am just looking for anything that looks. Well. Wrong.
Show no mercy in your critique.
(I still need help ._.)
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If I have time tomorrow I can give you a critique
Woo thank you
Ok TBH I love her she is awesome and there is nothing i can really Critique on
Nature: Okay, so under flaws, what do you mean "could almost be considered sexual assault"? Is she just very touchy, and other people don't like it? Because that's one thing. You can go too far and get really creepy quickly. Unless that's your intent, because people like that do exist. Just make sure you don't condone such behavior. Other than this, maybe add a couple more traits and a couple more flaws as you think of them, and you should be all set.
Social: So when you say not religious and give this description, you do mean more atheistic rather than agnostic, right? And the sword. I suggest renaming it to something a little more subtle. So maybe a foreign word for vengeance. Or an elven word for vengeance if you want to go that route.
History: She did have education, so it's not none. It's that minimal homeschooling you described. Give a rough age that this happened at in the description, too. Her backstory looks really interesting by the way!
Honestly the character looks really good, and at this point, I'm nit-picking and trying to give critiques to help with clarity.
Thanks for the critique, it may be obvious but I had no idea where issues needed fixing, so thank you!