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Started June 01, 2019 by Deleted user

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So… I been working on this comic thing (firts volume would be ready on august btw) and of course, some feedback is always welcome so… Here are some of them (because I haven´t finished every single one of them and only this ones got a picture):

And the universe for some context Invalid Universe
Also, made this in case someone ask the characters and not about the characters:

K so
Wren:

• Are her limbs solid lavarock, or flexible, or is that what her bones are made of?
• Is her white hair natural, dyed as a choice, drained from magic, or white from stress?
• Personality type is a big mood
• I think this is the first time I'd seen someone make a version of a pop culture thing in their world (on here anyways) so that's really neat!
• I too have Rice Crispy JointsTM
• Even if she has been involved with the gov. since birth, she still probably has some stances on which politicians she likes/disliked (for example, maybe one who everyone else adores was rude to her for being a chimera)
• Cool perks! Do they just inherit their parents' perks, or could someone inherit their granda's or aunt's?

Aura:

• I love that she's in her fifties, I don't usually see 'older' characters in books (at least the ones I read)
• Since she's not a chimera, why doesn't she have pupils?
• Does she have any powers?
• Not much to say for her, she's pretty neat!

Eli:

• One of my favorite character types!!
• Is the no-pupils thing a common trait in this world, or is it because he has some sort of ability?
• Did he inherit anything from his fae mother or not?

Isla:

• Seems like a cool character!
• What are her perks?
• It's pretty unlikely that a pencil could stab through a guy's eye into his brain unless there was a pretty huge amount of force pushing it in, and even then it'd likely break
• I'd warn against having multiple geniuses, it can make a character seem overpowered even when they really aren't

Penny:

• What curse made her be born a siren? Did one of her parents piss off a magic user, or was it a more random sort of curse?
• The 'possessions' story gave me a flashback to Penny From Heaven so thank you, I love that book
• What counts as a proper education? Advanced reading/math/science?

All in all pretty good, and the illustrations are beautiful!

Wren: Is solid rock, her bones look normal but they are stronger, her hair is naturally that way (is part of the whole ash manipulation thing), she never had a direct interaction with politicians, but doesn´t mind fae politics as much as she does with the rest, and no, only her parent´s.

Aura: Well, I know lots of people on their fifties and sixties that can still kick butt :D, and the whole no pupils thing is because sometimes people´s appearance can be influenced by their perk, and yes, she can control ghosts, one overpowered character who quit going to missions :D!

Eli: Yes and no, her mother had no pupils but her eyes were green (all faes have green eyes) , his eyes are just a different color because of his perk, yet he still has abnormally large eyes so there´s that. And I can´t say how common they are, around 50/50, at least around the paranormal community.

Isla: Telekinesis (in this world this comes with a little bit of clairvoyance or involves being a psychic like everything of the telepathic branch), as for the pencil, part of the trick is to break it and she can put as much force as she wants, but part of it was mostly a joke based on John Wick (and that time I heard some doctors talking about a kid with a pencil on his eye) and yes, I keep that in mind, she is supposed to have more limitations, she is pretty much a "nerd" but I have to make more clear where she isn´t as smart, I´ll try to make them more prominent.

Penny: her ancertors (undirectlly) got a witch angry and now every female descendant of that family is going to be a siren (witch had a crush on the dad of that family, stalked the man and found out he was married and had a newborn daugther, that got her angry…) and I say proper education since the person who raised her was pretty much a walking encyclopedia, so he tried to teach her all of the above, even if she no longer remembers half of it (Penny spent half of the lecture half asleep)

And for all the compliments: :D :D :D :D :D

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(May be a little late, but I found this on some old folders, it´s about Penny´s curse)
From the diaries of Dr. Harvey Coulson:
"Acording to my studies, from what I could find by asking the locals and some old leyends, I managed to stich up this story, including even the tiniest details… which is most likely what really happened…"

A long time ago, most likely on the 18th century, a witch fell in love with a fisherman, day by day, she hid between the barrels filled with fish and watched him go to the sea, she didn´t knew his name, only his face and his voice, the voice she fell in love with, that gorgeous voice that couldn´t be human yet… it was coming from one. She did that for years, until one day, the man didn´t show up, the witch worried, searched trough all the village, only to find him entering a house, his face exited, almost in tears. The witch hid between the bushes , not brave enough to talk with the man, when he was finally in, she came closer to the window, being as careful as she could, watching him aproach a woman lying on a bed, with a child on her arms, as the words "It´s a beautiful girl" came out of her mouth. It couldn´t be, the man she loved for all those years was married, he had a family, she watched as the rest of his children, two young boys, came rushing to the room.

The witch enraged with her heart broken, went and atacked the man, collecting part of his blood, while doing so. She ran, trying to keep herself alive as the man and the whole village followed her, then, as the last thing she did, before being killed, she cursed them, every female descendant of the man was going to have the same beautiful, yet haunting voice that could drive anyone insane, that could control people, each one of them was cursed to be a fish-like abomination that crave for human flesh, each one of them, starting from that little girl she saw, as she grew older, her hair fell out, her skin began to grow scales, she grew gills, her eyes were wider, she grew claws and sharp teeth, and the last thing she asked was to be killed. From that day, each female descendant of that family has been killed since the moment they are born, since none of them is born human, no more.

Hey, so, question to all your characters: What are your favorite songs?

We wil rock you (Queen)

7 Years (Lukas Graham)

Ride (Twenty One Pilots)

Country Roads (John Denver)

Torches (X Ambassadors)