forum Rate my character?

Started February 09, 2018 by Deleted user

tune

I think your character is cute and original cough shortie cough, but he's married to one person and then has like 5 love interests and he's eighteen. Was that a error or something? It just seemed a little odd.

heyy, i think it looks good overall, but maybe give us some more information about his looks? clothes, accesoires, shoes/bags and so on.
Besides that, his mannerisms are very, very common and doesn't make him stand out. he's your main character, so it's important he stands out.

I love his hobbies, but his personality seems a little too short? is he always confident? what makes him so confident, or is it just appearence? does he like school/learning? is he cheeky to teachers, or kinda nerdy, or a know-it-all?
he might also need more flaws, and tell us more about how being indecisive is a flaw for him.

As his favourite possesion, his record collection is very original! i absolutely love that! try to tell us what it has to do with his personality, favourite possesions says a lot about that.
Also, hamburgers for the win xd
He seems a sweetheart to his sister, maybe bring that more into his personality (unless he's only a sweetheart to her, and a jerk to the world)

I like the 'ALCN', it keeps me wondering what it stands for (please tell us haha)

Overall he's a good character, he's still a little vague to me because i don't know him ofcourse and a lot of writers create their characters while writing, or at least the small details.

@Dawg
I've written this character a lot, and continued his story past when he's 18. I keep track of everybody he's had a romantic relationship with, and I guess I just sort of used the 'Love Interests' tab to do that.
I should probably classify when those relationships take place… haha.
@Nouc
I felt like his personality didn't really have enough. I'll have to work on that. I also feel like he is a pretty average guy, except he doesn't really like that about himself, so he tries to make himself stand out. I have to write that in there somewhere.

Thank you both for the feedback!