forum Please give me advice? These are my first characters on notebook :)
Started by @The Palindrome
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Danica.Rose

I love the character, just a few notes, where is the necklace from and how does she manage to keep in throughout her time in the lab?

@reid

yes i can! and don't worry abt it, everything takes time to get used to

she sounds like an interesting character!! i really like how her telekinesis has an impact on her hair and eye color…however u don't go into much depth about the telekinesis itself! what's the range of her powers? how does she feel about having powers, especially after having grown up with the lab and all?? is she upset that she has them? do they make her feel powerful, or is she afraid of herself? i think you could play a lot with a whole…identity crisis and all. also would love more details about the lab! it's a little fuzzy (to me at least) about how she was treated…i can understand why she'd want revenge but the justification isn't quite there for me yet, y'know? i think a little bit of a connection there could really help! also…is she still in high school if she's 16?? i hope my advice helps, but then again! she's ur character, so!! :)

@The Palindrome

Thank you guys for the advice! I'll add to her character profile to clear up some stuff, although I was planning to give reasoning for most of those things in the actual story. She's 16 when the story starts, and that's when they put her in the 'experiment" of high school (she gets training and education before so she's not too different). I don't know if that's what I'll end up doing, but for now that's what's happening :) I will add about the necklace too. thank you guys for the advice! It's very helpful.