forum Please critique these characters!
Started by Angel
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@AustinOliver

I'll be honest, I really like your character, she seems really interesting. The only things I'm not really following are her mannerisms. They don't seem to line up with the rest of her personality. You say that she tends to look away from people when speaking to them, but you also say that she believes words are her greatest weapon. I feel like someone with that kind of confidence in their words would look people in the eyes with defiance. Or is there certain situations that push her to use her sharp tongue and stop being shy?
Also, personally, I would love to hear what makes her love the things that she does. For example, why is her grandmother's knitted mouse so important? Is her grandmother no longer alive and that is all she has left? Does it still smell like her? Does it bring images of her warm smile to mind? Similar, what about her mother's cake does she love so much? I know these are little details, but sometimes it's knowing these little things about the characters that allow us to dig deep into them when writing.

Over all, keep going, I think Eeva is turning out well rounded and strong!