forum Please Critique My Demons
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@Syguy20132
I'm sorry but I don't have anything written down at the moment. I just have some scenes and the general plot planned out in my head. I plan to make the story all of them are from into a comic instead of a book because I'm terrible at writing.
I hope you'll still critique them. Again, sorry.

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@Syguy20132
I'm sorry but I don't have anything written down at the moment. I just have some scenes and the general plot planned out in my head. I plan to make the story all of them are from into a comic instead of a book because I'm terrible at writing.
I hope you'll still critique them. Again, sorry.

Perhaps you could describe one of those scenes to me? Also, if you want to get better at writing, try looking up tips, write (write whatever you can come up with, even if it's just little seemingly insignificant drivel), and read, read, write, write, and write some more.

@Lightningclaw13 group

@Syguy20132
I can't describe them, I'm horrible with trying to explain or describe things.
Thanks for the advice =)
You don't have to critique them if you don't think you can without a scene. Sorry.

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@Syguy20132
Aww, thank you! I understand how life can be so that's why I don't mind waiting. And rushing people over art (or in this case a critique) annoys me so much!

@SupernaturalSyGuyIsTIred group

Xylas:
I like this demon’s name, for starters. As a villian, how does the demon act? Same question in regards to being an anti-hero. I’m partial to tall characters myself, and love that you made your character tall. In regards to the gender, I get that demons are genderless, though I do have to ask/suggest that you include the gender that the demon prefers to use the most. To me the name suggest male. The shape-shifting idea is cool. Can he change his appearance so that he looks human as well? Two different colored eyes is a unique distinguishing mark for anyone to have, and makes the character stand out, as does his birthmark. I kinda like his appearance. How does his hair feel unnatural? His hobbies are interesting. Being a demon, perhaps Xylas should also have a tendency to lie; this would make the points where he tells the truth more impactful. I like that his favorite animal is a wolf, but ask yourself why that is if you haven’t already. All in all, Xylas seems to be an interesting character. Best of luck to ya with how he turns out in the future.

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@Syguy20132
Thank you! I have an outline for them right now for both villain and anti-hero but they're very ruff at this point. (I'm short {5'5''} so I kinda just make a lot of my characters between 5'8''-6'6'') They are non-binary, like my other 2 demons (and 1 human character) are but they prefer just being called they/them, while the other 3 characters are ok with being called a male or female but would not mind/would rather be called they/them. Though they are physically male. Thanks and yes they can, mostly. The scar they have correlates to the sclera so even if they changed their sclera to white, the scar would be white as well. Yeah, I only have 1 other character with different colored eyes and none of my other characters have a birthmark that noticeable. Honestly, it feels like paper/a plastic bag but because of the time frame, they don't have these things so they just recognize that it feels off. I tried to make them interesting, glad you think so! The other 2 demons I have tend to lie so I thought it'd be interesting to have an honest demon. Yep, I have! It's because of the whole "lone wolf" thing and they're interested in pack life. Thank you! I really appreciate it!