forum Please critique my character!
Started by @elly_rae93
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@Rover3672

Okay so first of all I have a character named Eva too so that is fun (but they are very different so don't worry), secondly what exactly is your story? I think she is great overall but it could help me a bit more on how to improve her if I know the challenges she faces

@elly_rae93

Ok, when her story starts out she has this group of friends that are probably the worst influences. She feels really pressured by them to do all these crazy(sometimes illegal) things. Even though she knows her group isn’t the best she still really wants them to accept her and like her, so she struggles with wanting everyone to like her(she will change things she doesn’t really want to change, like her hair color, because her friends are doing it, or because her friends tell her it will look better). The story actually starts when she shows up in this small beach town with a lot of her memories gone(she doesn’t remember where she is from, her family, her friends, or anything that happened) everyone in the town is super nice to her and even though she doesn’t remember who her friends were she remembers the type of people they were so she doesn’t really know how to let people help her, and be kind to her, so she is really mean to them to start and gradually get nicer. Then when her old friends show up and want to take her home she has to decide if she’ll go with them or not which is hard for her because she loves being with people who make her feel good but she also wants to go home.

@Rover3672

That sounds pretty cool! Overall I think Eva is pretty cool and fits your story pretty well, I do think that she should be placed in tougher since she will have some internal conflicts. Maybe she has certain view about herself, they could be negative since she isn't living her own life but rather following her friends. Like drugs or even hurting someone who she has nothing against for example would be a good way to start out that internal conflict.

Sadly on a bit more negative side I think she is a a little basic and didn't come off as to dynamic, so gradually putting her in more dangerous situations could bring out something bigger in her.

Sorry if I got off topic or it doesn't make sense but overall I really like Eva!