forum Personality critiques for your characters! (Closed)
Started by @rosewater group
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@rosewater group

I'll give my opinions and critiques about your characters, such as how they made me feel and give personality evaluations!
I won't critique anything technical about them such as their appearance.

@@miccoc

Could you help me flesh out a character more so? I’d just want them to be made more dynamic and need another perspective of it all lol

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I have a couple of characters if you don't mind critiquing multiple.

Rin, and Jae
Thank you this is really helpful to me!

@rosewater group

@MysticMasaki Heya! I took a look at both! ♥ Hope this helps ★

Rin:
Her name is super cute! She seems like a really fun & cute person.
How did she get her nicknames? Does she like them?
When and why did she start drinking? How does it affect her life?
Add more to her personality tab! Like how she acts in public vs alone, and more personality traits!
If she's an adventurer, where does she go? Is she trying to find something?
Where did she get her education?

Jae:
Add more mannerisms for different emotions!
If her motivations are to stop people for ruining her plans, what type of plans are they? What motivates her to make the plans?
Again, work more in her personality tab! Add her most common emotions and how she handles people!
Her weapon is really ornate, where did she get it? Who made it? What does she use it on?
In her background, who attacked her town when her father was killed? What was her relationship with her father?
Her pets sound so cute ! I love their names.

@rosewater group

Mind looking at Blake? Blake Louise Ashley

@LilNerdyGingerKitsune .

I took a look at her and I'm very impressed with how fleshed out she is! I don't really have anything to suggest since she seems like a finished character, so I'd say focus on her future! Her past seems completed.
I really enjoyed reading her background, she could definitely have a readable story, keep it up!
The scar on her hand is mentioned a lot, where did she get it?

@LilNerdyGingerKitsune

@MissRose Thanks so much! The scar on her hand is sort of a joke, basically whenever she picks up anything slightly sharp she somehow manages to slice her hand open in the exact same spot for absolutely no reason. This has happened quite a few times now, so it's pretty defined at this point xD In the story I'm kind of teasing the trope that most scars have dramatic, tragic backstories behind them where for her it's no dark secret, nahh she's just unlucky.

@LilNerdyGingerKitsune

@MissRose Not really, the universe just hates her xD It's a comedy so I'm not to worried about it making perfect sense. She has friends who blame it on the black cat she adores, but she was unlucky before she met the kitty.