forum Offering Character Critique
Started by @CW-BornConfuzzledLeftILoveYa
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@CWTurtleOfFreedom

Okey dokey:

  1. Her personality is not developed at all. Caring what other people think could be a part of it, but it defiantly does not encompass her whole character
  2. Nice hobbies (lol) but I don’t think that ‘drinking chocolate milk with a spoon’ counts. Maybe put that under Talents?
  3. She is overweight for 5’1”. Not that I have anything against that, but just something you may want to consider.
  4. Backstory would be appreciated

Besides that, I like her! Happy writing!

@CWTurtleOfFreedom

XD You probably do, and that’s why its just not enough. You know yourself so well that when the time comes to write it on paper, you write a few basics to trigger your knowledge of the subject. Trust me, I’ve done it so often. You too!

@CW-BornConfuzzledLeftILoveYa

Sure!

It's nice! I should point out one thing. An image. I find it SO,SO,SO much easier to recognize and envision a character when there's an image. Even if it's just a quick doodle,it's very helpful to get the jist of what a character looks like when you have some visual idea. It would also be helful if you filled out the "Random facts" category. But,overall,he sounds like a good-natured guy that I could get along with. Hope this helps! :)

Raven

I would be more specific in the politics and give some reason why for her view points and options. Like give her a reason why. Why doesn't she like LGBT people. Other than that everything was was.

@TheMusicalVampire

With your character @Annika:

  • I noticed that she was more than slightly overweight comparing her weitght, age, and height.
  • Maybe adding some more prejudices could add on to her personality.
  • Also, I feel she is rather young to have an opinion on LGBT people unless she has a backstory on it. Adding that can clear it up.
  • This is kinda more opinion based but, maybe putting eating instead of drinking becuase she does it with a spoon. I don't really know though.
  • Putting more on the politics.
  • Adding a history can help a TON when creating a character. It will also give her more personality and make her seem less "robot" like.

This is a very well thought out character and after tweaking, she will be amazing.
In my opinion, she seemed like a very generic middle school girl with no personality. So, adding on more of a backstory and some other stuff will help.
I was also wondering if you did the art?? If so, it is AMAZING.

@CW-BornConfuzzledLeftILoveYa

This is my bean Lucas.

I LOVE how much effort you put in him! Good job! As I have previously said,I find it helpful to have an image along with the character. Even if it's a 15-minute sketch on MS Paint or a 20 hour long in-depth ultra realistic drawing on Photoshop or something,make a drawing. :)