forum New girl, could use some judgement haha
Started by @sharkfinn_ey
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@sharkfinn_ey

Hello :)
I've had the idea for a storyline for years, but am only now starting with the characters…
Could you look at her and give some tips/advice?
Thanks beforehand!

@Yamatsu

It's still locking me out. Did you put the character on public, or just the universe. I still have no clear idea about how it works.

@sharkfinn_ey

She isn't in a universe, and the character itself was turned on public, but it keeps giving me an application error (whatever that means). Maybe it'll work in a couple of hours, sorry

@sharkfinn_ey

I've been having that problem as well, if you reload on the error page, it should turn out fine.

It should work now haha, thank you for your time

@Yamatsu

I like the direction you're going in, there's just a few tidbits;

Why is aggression her first response? I feel that training as an assassin would teach her to temper her… well… temper so that she doesn't blow her cover.
I think her politics are fine, but why would she actively target those that oppose her views. Doesn't that make her just as bad? I'm not defending them by any means, but I feel that actively seeking out and beating up those with opposing views isn't the best way to go about it.
Why does she have trouble getting out of bed? She has her obligations to her work and her personal mantra, but why is it difficult for her to follow through?
Staying awake for multiple days straight can lead to hallucinations, slower reaction times, and eventual death. I don't think an assassin would want any of these while focusing on the job. If anything, I'd give her a screwed up Circadian rhythm that is alleviated by taking frequent power naps. This could let her stay awake for far longer.

I'll let you keep going, but these are just some things to keep in mind!

@sharkfinn_ey

Thank you for all the trouble, and your comments really give me some good and new insight.
She's targetting those people (especially those in power) because she thinks she can prevent bad things from happening (for example, helping a little kid with abusive family).
I'm still researching sleeping disorders, so I didn't want to give that label just yet. Sleeping pattern is formed by former youth trauma (still working on that). That's why (verbal) aggression is one of her first responses. Someone must take it very far for her to get aggressive in public.

It isn't necisserly that she has trouble coming out off bed, but she almost has this 'so what's the point' vibe going on at some moments, where she really lives from day to day and nothing really matters.