@Oniyuri
Hello, so I recently made a new character and while there are some things not fully finished or added yet I'd like to know how I'm doing so far with her?
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Need this new character reviewed please!!
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@Cassiopeia
@Oniyuri Hey! I'd love to help out, give me a minute…
@Cassiopeia
This character seems very interesting, for the most part! It's a very good start to a protagonist, I only had one or two questions.
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It's noted that she is a demon, but in the 'History' section it mentions that she is 'College-level' in education. Is there a reason for this? Did she actually go to school, or does she just know because she's a demon? Just something to think about.
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Is she a pure demon or half-demon? I ask because there are some things in the profile that seem to suggest she is at least half human, since she has a favorite food, a birth date and has recieved a birthday gift before. Not that these things are exclusively human things to do, but it does seem that way. (Forgive me if this is incorrect! This is your story, and you should write it however you please. ^u^)
Overall, though it seems really interesting. :D