forum Need help with characters?

Started July 16, 2018 by @Sugar-Lover

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I'll review your characters

Could you critique my character Rie? Here's the link; Rie Katayama Thanks!

Great character, well thought out. I was amazed at how much you wrote for each section

Thanks!

Hi! can you please critique my boy, Max? Thanks!

Oze is filled out well, full of information. Have fun writing you book.

Hi! Can you critique my main character, Eros, please? Thanks so much!

Your character Eros is on private, if you were to make it public I could review him.

The Bird Could you critique my villain? I feel like he's a little one-dimensional right now and would love any tips you have for improving him!

In other names you might want to put The Bird's real name, it seems like the other characters know his name. Early twenties… mid twenties… late twenties? Also instead of saying something about Cynthia or other characters you could replace it with information about him. (Like how he would never blank. Or he used to be like blank when he was a child.)

How do you make a character public? It won't let me…

I know that but it won't slide over to public. I have been trying to figure out how but it won't budge

Hmm, that's strange. Is the universe your character's in set to public?

I had to delete the universe to change to setting for the universe to public. I am going to see if that worked and if not, then I will message about it

It didn't work. The universe is public but it still won't let me change the setting for Eros

Coraline Sera Hi will you critique my character Cora

Try this. Maybe it will work again. @laneyI will critique your character for you if you want to critique mine…

Ok

I enjoyed learning about Cora. It made me want to read the story that you are writing! Good job and keep up the good work!

So here are a few things I think you can improve on

• in identifying makes you can explain the black nose and socks
• come up with a history your characters backstory is what makes them whole even if they can't remember it it's an important thing for you to know
• also in nature it's really good to get to know your character on a personal level
• also if you can't thing of any mannerism or other personally traits think of something you do or one of your little quirks

I really like where your character is going he just needs some personality keep up the hard work 😄

I hope this helped Also thanks

No problem. While you were looking over Eros, I had filled in whatever I could about him. With the black nose and socks, it kind of goes with the type of breed he is. Does that make sense?

Oh thanks for clarifying that

It will explain it in the story. Thanks for helping me!