forum Meet Milo (Requesting constructive criticism)

Started May 07, 2019 by Madi

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Tell me what you think of him. I'd like constructive criticism if you have any!

Hi, I REALLY liked him and would love to learn more about the story, but just wanted to point out that his mother couldn't have been the one who treated him at the hospital. That's illegal in practically every country.

Thank you! I never knew that so I'm glad you corrected me. :)

So i love tis kiddo?? he's amazing!!
His flaws are great, the combination weak-willed and indecive match really well.
Under personality type I'd personally work it out a little more (things he likes, dislikes, what he does to calm down etc). But you wrote down his personality type, which is cool as well and it's great if that works for you :)

I love to finally see a younger teenage transboy! Representation!!<3
The way you write it (or how i read it maybe) it seems like the story is about him being trans, but i feel like there will be much more going on?
You could give some more information maybe about where he is in his transition, how does he bind? (please be aware that people do look up to fictional characters, please let him bind in a safe way!!<3)
And maybe where his dysphoria focusses on (For example; voice, hourglass figure, hight)? As this is a thing most transpeople deal with in their everyday life.

All by all I love him and I love the name Milo! You really did great

Hey Mate!

Just wanna say you got an amazing character in the works here. The concept feels very akin to Maxine from the TV show "butterfly" (But the opposite way round) and I love how you've represented another facet of society!

Keep up the great work (ㆁᴗㆁ✿)

Thank you guys so much for the feedback. He binds with a binder now, but before he was out to his family he didn't have a way to get one. He's taking T as well, so his voice is starting to break more often and is getting deeper, so he's more uncomfortable about his chest size than anything else, and he really wants to get top surgery. Him being trans is an important part of who he is, but there is definitely more to the story. I'm really glad you like him, and I'll be sure to add a little more information about him.