forum judge this guy?
Started by @sharkfinn_ey
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LazyWriter

I like him. Especially the " Can be seen with mcdonalds fries. " I think at some parts, though, it may be a little bit harder to picture certain things or really get an idea about them.

@Wheeze_For_Me

It’s really good, but, what does it mean by drums? In my characters I put the role as the story the are in. By drums do you mean he plays the drums in a band?

@Rossini

Hey! I hope you are having an amazing day so far! I'm not an expert or anything of the sort (actually I am super new here akskkals) but I hope I can help you with your character!
•Oh, I love the section you added about meaning of the name, it's very creative!
•Uh, I am not sure (I could be totally wrong and if so please forgive me and my dumb ass brain) but I think that a male that have this height should at least have 70 kg (I COULD BE WRONG OK I DUNNO)
•Nice identifying mark!
•I loved the quote section as well!
•The mannerisms are awesome! But I think you could add the way he talks, like does he curses a lot? Does he use many slangs or a more formal vocabulary? And also how do you know if he's feeling x emotion? Like, how do you know if he's angry or nervous or happy and so on?
•The flaws are like the ones I have akskaldkal. But I think you could maybe add a little more? Maybe something like he's insecure or I dunno something like that
•His personality type is super well done! I looooved it
•Maybe you already have it all sorted out, but I think it would be good to put some notes on his story, like his past and relationship with his family
So yeah, I don't know if this helps or something but know that Tyrone is a great character! He's pretty sorted out already!
(Also english is not my main language so there may be some grammatical errors please ignore them)

@sharkfinn_ey

(your english is great, don't worry! <3)
I am awful at guessing what weight is healthy for what height hahah, I'll ask around a bit about it I guess.
His mannerisms are updated a bit, but these usually come as I'm writing most of the time
His family I'm still putting together, his mom and ftm trans-brother are in the picture and his dad's old barn/garage, but I'm not sure if I'll put him in or not..

Thanks for looking over him and the compliments!! :)