ill critique your characters

hey im bored so i will give you feedback on your characters

@WriteOutofTime

Hello i just got a really good critique on this character but why not get another opinion. Critique my main girl?

@writelikeyourerunningoutoftime I think your character is well developed, i only have a few questions
did she become emoitionless when her husband died, or has she always been that was?
Is there a reason she doesn't like polotics?
Other than that, I would say your character is really developed

@WriteOutofTime

Thanks!

barabara

Could you critique my character Rie? Here's the link; Rie Katayama

@Joneathan

Would you please look at these characters for me?

@Huxly

Could ya critique one of these characters, please? do anyone except for Scor or Acier because I didn't create those ones. Veniciodoctrina

Amstance

barbara, you character Rie has tons of background info, but I still don't feel like I know her personality. You have a very well developed backstory, but I feel like I want to know her herself more. I need to know more about her. What does she do when shes embarrased? What about when she's nervous? Other than that, I think you have an great character with greater things to come

barabara

Thank you!

Amstance

@Joneathan your characters are a start, however the mannerisms still don't tell me much about them. For theo, why does he have such a big ego? If his favorite possession is a guitar pick, does he play guitar? For Ellen, popper her neck isn't really a manneris. but saying something like, she pops her neck when she's angry, that gives a better description. She's 67, why are her politics undecided, that doesn't make sense. For Lune, again, why the undecided politics, that's not really realistic even if she is childish. Hope this helped, keep up the work!

Amstance

also @Huxly on your second post i can't see your characters.

@captain-universe

hey, could you please look at my character?

@Huxly

You @t the wrong person lol. Those aren't my characters. =)

@Kaloobia

Hey dude! If you're not too overloaded yet, can you take a look a this guy of mine? Gabriel Brewer I'm afraid of him veering towards stereotypical, and as much as I like him (as his creator) I don't want him to be too likable just because he has a sob story. Thanks in advance!

@TheMusicalVampire

This is my bean Lucas.

Thank you!

Amstance

@Kaloobia Right away, I noticed that you said your character doesn't eat consistently. I want to know why. Every character trait is there for a reason. You said what he does when he's nervous, but what does he do when he's bored, afraid, excited etc.? Just things to keep in mind. When you mention Gabe used to go to drag shows, what kind of drag shows? Since he's a rapper, do you have any songs that he has written? I would love to see them. Or maybe a quote that inspires him if you can't write songs lol. his story is really sad, and I think you have a great character, but you don't want him to be too stereotypical, like you said, so really focus on something that makes him unique. Like maybe he plays ukulele or something you wouldn't suspect.

Amstance

@TheMusicalVampire HOW CAN I MAKE YOUR BEAN HAPPY!!!! First off, I love your character Lucas. I feel really bad because when he was a kid, he was happy, and I really wish it was still that way. I honestly don't have any criticism, because i kinda suck at criticizing characters. But i will tell you what i like about your character. i love that he makes ocs, because that's all I've been doing this summer, and I really hope the girl that was mean to him and drived him to almost suicide feels horrible and that one he becomes happy again.

@mellowlynea

Heya! Got a review already of these two but I'd love to have more opinions on them. Cheers and thank you for this!

@Kaloobia