forum I want feedback and help, please!
Started by @Hawkeye
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@Hawkeye

So, I’m working on a couple of oc’s(not for a story, just for my own head), and I want some feedback. My main character is a demon named Seraphine, and she has a vessel(person she’s possessing) named Anna(me). I filled out her character profile, but want help on how to write a profile for my vessel. Her opinions don’t really matter, but I still want to have a profile for her. And I want feedback on Seraphine. Thank you!

@bluejaya

You can always use the character profile to talk about how Anna was before she got possessed, as I imagine that will influence your demon character at least a little. Maybe you could describe how she would feel about being possessed if she weren't, you know, possessed? You could also think about whether she can still think while possessed or if she's totally out, because if she can think, or communicate with Seraphine, you have an opportunity for a really interesting character dynamic, if that's something you'd be into.

Also, you can afford to describe Seraphine in more depth. You can say more than if she's nice or mean, you can describe how she feels about human things, what she does with her vessel, and most importantly, what her goal is. Meaning, why is she possessing Anna? What does she want to do? Is she doing this of her own accord, or is someone else making her?

You can also describe her magic in more depth. Like, what are the limitations of her magic? What kinds of things can she do? On what scale? If you just describe it as "magic" there isn't much you can go off of. Hope this helped!