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@Say-Hello-to-the-Rugs-Topology

Hi! Would you mind critiquing this guy?

Pretty interesting! To start, the concept of this guy making his one and only goal to find his sis is pretty neat and tells a good bit about him, and the other provided personality traits seem to fit his lifestyle. Nothing in here seems to contradict other details which is great. I certainly would add a little bit more to his personality to flesh him out even further and make him more relatable to an audience. Things like how did he cope when his family was found and his siblings were taken, did it take him awhile to adapt to living alone in the wilderness, and how long did it take him to get good in hand to hand combat? Other than that, I say keep up the good work because this character is pretty good :)

@Say-Hello-to-the-Rugs-Topology

Can you critique one of my main characters? Thanks!

Not bad. First thing I noticed were how short some of the passages were, but upon reading them, I felt I was given sufficient info about the character herself :). There's definitely more that can be expanded upon. Backstory is a wonderful thing to have, but i know it's not something that comes to mind in a day. The flaws were satisfactory and i just love the idea of a character who's a leader, yet doesn't meet all the traits of one, which makes it interesting! The only thing i could see that might need some improvement is the motivation. "Getting back at people," is a good start, but it might be better to think about the character's long term goal(s) too. You could have her goal to be to get back at a particular character, and or it could be as simple as to live a long and fulfilling life. That's really all i could offer, but i think you're doing good!

@Say-Hello-to-the-Rugs-Topology

Hey! If you still have time would you mind critiquing my boy Levi? Levi Satou Thank you!

Hey! This is probably the most in-depth character I've read about on here so far, so give yourself a pat on the back! I looked over parts of this character multiple times in search for anything i could recommend (especially the nature tab because there was so much i kept feeling like i passed over something) but I really had a hard time finding something that wasn't done well. He sounds very real, and i think the part that hit home for me was the personality type section. (it was painfully relatable) but i also enjoyed how it wasn't so 'relatable' that it seemed standard, so very well done! The only thing I can throw in criticism-wise, is you can always add more hobbies than just one (but i guess i might not need to say that if you would say that his talents are also hobbies lol), and also, I thought it would be cool to find out what the arrow tattoo on his right wrist symbolized to either you or him. Otherwise, i got nothin'. This character is damn good!

@Kaloobia

Dude thank you???? This is so sweet, you flatter me <3 I actually completely forgot that I didn't put a meaning to that tattoo, so thanks for the reminder! And yeah, for me his talents and hobbies are sorta interchangeable, but I could definitely go into more detail about that.
Thanks again, and I'm so glad he's realistic, it's what I strive for :-) <3

@Say-Hello-to-the-Rugs-Topology

Here’s my gay twin: Timothy Wells

There's a lot of good stuff going on with this guy and i like him very much. This fella also had me a little touched (especially by the background portion ouch i know how that feels). The over caring, people pleasing, kind of a try hard personality is easily one that anyone can root for. In my opinion though, it's a tad flat. I think he could be brought further to life with some more personal goals/motivations such as for example: does he yearn to have a family of his own one day. Perhaps a little more info on his downtime if he has any. I know its easy to drive yourself absolutely loony if you hyperfixate on someone for months on end. (i've been there and it's really rough) Otherwise I think his personality really suits him well. Side note, I absolutely LOVED the fact that he has powers that are subtle and don't take over his whole character and backstory. It makes him seem so much more human to me. Overall, I'd say he's making his way up there! Keep at it! :)