forum I need more than one person to critique this character - I'm running out of ideas. The link to her page is right there
Started by Megan
tune

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Amber group

Ok. This is a good charachter, you have covered the necessary topics , maybe you need to go into more detail? Ok, heres some advice:
-For hairtype, is there a specific way she does her hair? Pony tail, loose, braids? Is it loose curls? Or a slight wave?
-For mannerisms, is there a certain way she acts during certain situations? Or just common movements she makes? Or phrases she says?
-What kind or clothes does she wear? What kind of colors does she wear? Does she have favorite outifts, or style?
-Is she loud? Quiet? Snarky? How does she communicate with other people?
-For hobbies, she needs more.
-For the rest, consider adding a backstory. Explain why she has powers and is half dragon.
Yea, so overall you need more description. But good start! Tell me what you think of my advice! See ya! ;)

@RJ-world-building

Great job so far! However, there are a couple of areas that could be fleshed out more.
-Mannerism, good so far, but she could use a few more! If you can't think of any here is a generator to help.
http://www.springhole.net/writing_roleplaying_randomators/character-quirk.htm
-Motivations are interesting but why does your character have 'Survival/Proving herself' as her motivation? Is someone doubting her and she desperately wants to prove them wrong? Does she come from a harsh background where surviving in necessary? Does she have unfinished business so she can't die just yet?
-Prejudices-Some humans give her a "bad vibe"/Rich people ? who flaunt it, Why is there a question mark? Could you expand on why she hates rich people, even a single sentence is fine.
-Talents- Flying, telecommunication, was she born with these powers? did she gain them or work hard to achieve them? are these powers common in the world, or is she unique?
-Hobbies-Running/doodling, does she run competitively, does she casually jog for exercise? Why does she like to run? Same with 'doodling'. What does she draw, etc? I think a fleshed out character would have more than two hobbies. People in real life don't just have two activities they do in their spare time. Below are a couple of generators that might give you some inspiration.
http://www.springhole.net/writing_roleplaying_randomators/interests.htm
http://www.springhole.net/writing_roleplaying_randomators/character-skills.htm