forum I need a hand fixing up my character

Started March 18, 2019 by @UselessPotato

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I need help with my character, River

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1. What is a formal police attire in your story? is that the same as normal clothes?
2. What's their favourite hairstyle(s)? or is there any sort of regulation on it from their job?
3. Try to avoid saying mostly in describing something on your character. instead of mostly gold try gold with hints of… or if the other elements in their eyes aren't important enough just go with gold so no-one questions it.
4. Oh, I see in her backstory and nature thing that they're a shapeshifter. is this what influences all the things in looks? if so, maybe use the page looks to list their preferences. like body type: likes to choose a shape that's taller than 1,50 m with the build of a martial arts champion.
5. Put more attention in the nature page. since they can seemingly change their appearance to whatever, their personality is probably more important than their looks.
6. What are the rules of their shapeshifting? can they do whatever? can they be a dog? can they only be humans? can they be a baby? a giant? do they actually become stronger if they turn from an old lady into a professional wrestler?

Is that somewhat helpful?

Thanks, this really helped.
Is it alright if you check my main character for me?
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sure:

1. I like how you chose the motivation to be revealing the truth and her flaw that she's gullible.
2. why does she want to reveal the truth though? I mean, she's a journalist but why?
3. what do you mean she has to feel in the talents bit? does she have to physically touch the person to copy their powers or do you mean the power has to be used on her?
4. Don't be afraid to elaborate on the personality type. try to come up with ways the words you describe her with actually manifest because there are many ways for one word to be interpreted. to be more specific. _{some of this might end up in mannerisms though.}
   • who is she loyal to and why? how far is she willing to go.
   • if she's passionate, does that mean she skips around all day while laughing and throwing sarcastic comments at random conversations? what's she passionate about and how does she use it?

Right now there isn't that much for me to comment on, but I'sure that you'll be adding a lot more in the future. For now, this is really the most I can come up with.