forum I'll give some criticism,
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Poppy Jeffs

Could you critque this guy? I'm still working on a background that fits the setting, so that's not there yet oops

Oop, Be interesting,his backstory, why are you unsure about is weight?? Is it because it's always changing? if so add that.

His eye colour would be hazel.

Copper… Skin? Like tanish yellow?

Hm, I'd be interested why he's scared of zombie movies, that's extremely interesting.

Why does he keep eating strawberries if they make him sick?

He needs more negatives, I can't see how he's an idiot?
"Likes to think he's all tough and edgy, but really is a sweetheart that even looks like a sweetheart." LOVE ThIS!!

Maybe more about his guitar and skills. I see he's good at soccer, but what other skills does he have?

OOOh, why does he love golden retrievers the most? Past beloved childhood pet as one? Or just sorta some connection?

Why's a favourite possession a jacket?

This guy really needs a backstory,

Poppy Jeffs

I'm really trying to perfect my precious girl and any advice or criticism helps.

Alice

I love her already she's big waifu, pffft, though I believe shes a little low on flaws and they're all pretty bland! Add more interesting flaws. Same with her personality, ehh, a little short and simple- nothing wrong with that! Just her backstory, can really add more personality to her, so scan throughout her backstory again and pick a few personality traits you think she could've developed through her backstory, adds a lot of depth and good character creation.

Poppy Jeffs

If you wouldn't mind taking a look at my protagonist, Carter, I would greatly appreciate it

"Also has a hard time believing in redemption" I LOVE YES!
LOVE HIS MANNERISMS!
he's extremely relatable and I love that!
I cant really think of any critique ngl..
he'd be an interesting mc