forum I'll critique your charcters!! *WARNING* brutally honest ;)
Started by @purpleconverse
tune

people_alt 13 followers

@purpleconverse

Okay so here's what i think….

^Go more into details in the body type tab, don't be afraid to fetishize her a bit! For example, does she have broad shoulders or a crooked jawline? Does she have a big or small chest? Does she have a small waist or thick thighs? Does she have strong calves or big feet? The trick is with this tab is to start from her head and shoulders and work your way down.
^There's different types of rope braids, and her hair length usually goes here in the hair style tab instead of the color. Does she keep her braid loose or tight? Does she have it on the side of her head or in the back? Nothing major here, just little details.
^For someone her age and "muscular" she is 10- 15 pounds underweight. Muscular people tend to weigh a bit more because they are carrying muscle. Also, she is almost an adult so she would naturally weigh more because of her height.
^In the hobbies tab, what else does she do? Name specific things she does out of pure habit or things she does alone.
^She is kind of stereotypical. I get it that she's a tomboy but all girls have something… girly-ish. Just throw in something semi-girl to spice up your character!
^She seems a bit… overrated. Yes she can love guns, bows, all that stuff, but she seems to be perfect at everything.
^Anything else she hates? I mean nobody likes snobs, but is there anything that she hates even if some people love? And naming small things like her hating a certain animal or a bad habit, will help her a lot.
^Her flaws make her seem… not so great. It's not her fault that other people can't take a joke so that's not a flaw. Maybe you meant that she hates girls?? I'm not sure but that needs some work. Naming some more flaws would help her seem more relatable to your readers. For example, is she a nail biter? Does she tap her foot a lot? Don't be afraid to name some flaws.
^There's a big difference from having anxiety and being anxious. Also, what does she do when she's sad?
^It seems like she was too young to work anywhere. Being that she just turned 16, and the "disease" crap happened before then, most places wouldn't take her in being that young.
^Everyone graduates at 18…

Overall I'd say that she seems a bit overrated and a bit stereotypical. Don't be afraid to throw in some details and spice up your character! You want your character to be lovable, interesting, and above all realistic. Good luck on your story!!

@purpleconverse

Okay so here's what i think…

^In the body type tab, don't be afraid to go into full details!! For example, does he have broad shoulders or big hands? Does he have toned arms or a strong six-pack? Yes he may be tall and slender but I strongly think you should go into a bit more details.
^In the mannerisms tab, what does he do when he does experience different emotions? People may hide their emotions but sometime or another they tend to show a bit.
^In the flaws tab, I think it would help make him more relatable to your character if you would name little flaws as well. For example, nail biting, cracks knuckles a lot, taps foot constantly, are all good examples of little flaws.
^In the personality type tab, I would go into more details. Don't be afraid to even fetishize him a little bit!!
^I think adding something to his background would be a huge help later on in your story, and also, evaluate what you mean when you say that he has a "high level of education''

Overall i like your character, just don't be afraid to go into details! Good luck on your story! I can't wait to see what happens with Darius and Winnie!!!

@purpleconverse

Ceri Archer Please could you critique my character?

Okay so here we go…

^First of, I love her name!!
^In the hair style tab, how does she normally wear her hair? In a ponytail? In the messy bun?
^In the mannerisms tab, what does she do when experiencing each emotion?
^In the motivations tab, how does ''knowing stuff'' motivate her? Is there something specific she wants to know?
^In the flaws tab, what are some little flaws she has?
^In the prejudices tab, what is something she hates? Your character has to have something she ''fight'' in the story whether it be physically or emotionally.
^Go into more details in the personality tab!! Heck, even write a whole paragraph. But you need details.
^In the background tab, explain why and what happened. This part is very important to your story.

Overall, don't be afraid to go into details!! Details help you in the long run.

Lottie M

Ceri Archer Please could you critique my character?

Okay so here we go…

^First of, I love her name!!
^In the hair style tab, how does she normally wear her hair? In a ponytail? In the messy bun?
^In the mannerisms tab, what does she do when experiencing each emotion?
^In the motivations tab, how does ''knowing stuff'' motivate her? Is there something specific she wants to know?
^In the flaws tab, what are some little flaws she has?
^In the prejudices tab, what is something she hates? Your character has to have something she ''fight'' in the story whether it be physically or emotionally.
^Go into more details in the personality tab!! Heck, even write a whole paragraph. But you need details.
^In the background tab, explain why and what happened. This part is very important to your story.

Overall, don't be afraid to go into details!! Details help you in the long run.

Thank you! If you want something in return I'd be open to drawing one of your characters if you want?

@purpleconverse

hey could you look at this character for me please?

Here's what i think…

^He is extremely underweight for someone his height and age. The normal weight is 132 - 167lbs. Even if it is genetic, it is extremely unhealthy so i would suggest changing that.
^How does his family motivate him?
^Naming little flaws would help the reader relate to your character more
^Any more…"normal" talents..??
^Don't be afraid to go into more detail in the paragraph section. Heck, even write a paragraph
^You spelled "college" wrong in the background tab

That's about it. Your character seems to have an interesting story! Can't wait to see what happens!!

@purpleconverse

Hello! I'd love to hear your critiques for my character Ace!
Let me know how he's likable/dis-likeable.
He is a supporting character in a crime thriller + a splash of comedy.
Thank you!

Here's what i think….

^It doesn't seem like much, but specifying his weight will help describe his body type
^Don't be scared to go into more details in his body type. For example, just say where he's more muscular or thin and thing like that
^What does he do when feeling each emotion? Does he crack his knuckles when he's anxious? Or doodle when sad?
^I'd suggest going into a bit more details in the personality type tab. More details = the better

I think i just fell in love with your character… he is like… THE love of my life. I love him! I can't wait to read your story!!

@purpleconverse

https://www.notebook.ai/plan/characters/576514/edit Hey so this guy is like a serial killer I was wondering what you thought.

^How does he normally wear his hair?
^Go into more details in the body type!! Every little thing counts
^In the mannerisms… How does he carry himself? What does he do when sad, mad, happy, anxious, etc.?
^Little flaws will help your character be more realistic
^Going into more details in the personality type tab, will for sure help in the long run

Okay so i really want to read this story. It seems like it would keep me on the edge of my seat! Can't wait to read the story!!

@CW-BornConfuzzledLeftILoveYa

Hello! Coould you please critique my characters? I know that they're a lot of characters, so if you don't have much time, you could just do two or maybe even just the first one.