forum I'll critique characters and try to respond
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@jantz

just link your character and make sure they're public. try and also give me certain aspects of your character you want critiqued.

@Lexishere

I want all aspects of her criticized. I’m using her for a roleplay and not exactly for a story at the moment. Just keep in mind that i’m Only 14 and my brain isn’t exactly fully functioning anytime of the day.

@jantz

I want all aspects of her criticized. I’m using her for a roleplay and not exactly for a story at the moment. Just keep in mind that i’m Only 14 and my brain isn’t exactly fully functioning anytime of the day.

seems interesting.

-what kind of RPs is she involved in?
-Where did the portal take her?
-What made her rebellious? Did her parents not give her enough attention and now that's all she wants? Did someone else influence her?
-Her appearance is a little bland. Maybe go into a little more detail describing her looks.
-She's a halfing? Great, I love that. But what kind of magics can she use due to her being a halfing?
-I'm not sure what the personality means. Maybe try and describe it.

@AloeVera groupMentallyImInACottage

Hey! I've got one boi who I'm putting through a lot of critiques hoping that a new set of eyes could catch something self-conflicting that doesn't work, something that needs more explanation, or anything in general. He's already got a ton on him, so if you don't want to read all that, I can link to another character who is less developed!

Take your time and don't strain yourself, thank you!

@jantz

Hey! I've got one boi who I'm putting through a lot of critiques hoping that a new set of eyes could catch something self-conflicting that doesn't work, something that needs more explanation, or anything in general. He's already got a ton on him, so if you don't want to read all that, I can link to another character who is less developed!

Take your time and don't strain yourself, thank you!

You've put so much work into this character and I honestly love him to death. I love how you have so much art of him and how you've added so many of your own categories to add to your character. I couldn't find many things wrong, so instead, I'll give you a list of things I loved while reading the character sheet.

-I loved how detailed the "looks" section is. Even if you didn't have the artwork I'd still be able to envision your character.
-The amount you put into his nature boggles me. Even your writing style demonstrates his personality. Everything flowed together really perfectly and I found myself laughing at a few points despite just meeting this character.
-How you split up the parts of his life in the "background" section was really nice and easy to digest.
-The amount of art you have for this character is amazing.
-I love how you added his mental and physical conditions. Most writers on this website, myself included, wouldn't think to do that.
-After reading how he's an alcoholic and marijuana boi, reading "Healthy Decisions (Failed) " really made me laugh

@AloeVera groupMentallyImInACottage

Hey! I've got one boi who I'm putting through a lot of critiques hoping that a new set of eyes could catch something self-conflicting that doesn't work, something that needs more explanation, or anything in general. He's already got a ton on him, so if you don't want to read all that, I can link to another character who is less developed!

Take your time and don't strain yourself, thank you!

You've put so much work into this character and I honestly love him to death. I love how you have so much art of him and how you've added so many of your own categories to add to your character. I couldn't find many things wrong, so instead, I'll give you a list of things I loved while reading the character sheet.

-I loved how detailed the "looks" section is. Even if you didn't have the artwork I'd still be able to envision your character.
-The amount you put into his nature boggles me. Even your writing style demonstrates his personality. Everything flowed together really perfectly and I found myself laughing at a few points despite just meeting this character.
-How you split up the parts of his life in the "background" section was really nice and easy to digest.
-The amount of art you have for this character is amazing.
-I love how you added his mental and physical conditions. Most writers on this website, myself included, wouldn't think to do that.
-After reading how he's an alcoholic and marijuana boi, reading "Healthy Decisions (Failed) " really made me laugh

Ah!! Thank you so much! I've definitely had a ton of fun writing him and I really appreciate this! and ye,s, i have to respond to each comment you made bc it made me go back and look at what you're talking about and i just gotta

-@ looks section as much as i appreciate people describing characters, my brain nEVER likes to cooperate with what the words say and create an image for me so i try my best to describe as much as i can
-im in tears i'm so glad i have a writing style and even better it woRKS WITH JEAN'S CHARACTER i-
-i used to just write one big wall of text and man i hate looking at a big wall of text and knowing i have to read it
-i'm sobbing the art in his gallery doesn't even make up half the drawings i've made:')
-it actually helps to have his health in mind when you're writing him bc i can remember to add a withdrawal symptom if he's gone too long without getting high or something to that effect, which just adds to the story!
-LMAO I FORGOT ABOUT THAT AND IT MADE ME LAUGH THANK U