forum I can critique characters!
Started by @alanye
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@alanye

I haven't really critiqued anyone's character before, so I can't say I'll be the best at it, but I want to try. Send me your characters and I'll do what I can!

@alanye

@Kaloobia

  • good detail on the hair, that's a nice way to describe it
  • !!!! please! don't let anyone whitewash him!!!
  • I love me a boy with great thighs oh yes
  • your nature page is far better than I can do, being self-centered, childish, and attention seeking are all traits that fit fairly well together, I like it
  • does he wear makeup all the time??
  • his motivation, while being cliche, is also realistic. Many people strive to be loved by someone and want someone who cares for them.
  • good character, but backstory!! I know you might not have it all fleshed out, but the backstory is very important and is key to your characters. Just something to think about. Things like: what is his family like? Why did he decide to join a band? Did he have a different plan before or was he always wanting to be in a band? Did he take voice lessons? Does he play any instruments?

I really like him, he sounds awesome and like someone I would want to know. Totally sounds like someone I would stan, tbh. Good work on him!

@Kaloobia

Aaahhh thank you you're too nice to both him and me <3 Those are all good things to think about, will definitely work on his backstory. Thanks so much! :)

@alanye

@Rory sorry I’m so late!

  • first of all, love love LOVE the picture like I think I already have a good idea of what this character is like
  • okay so she’s pretty tan, but….uh… by the way… just a … fair warning… don’t describe her skin tone like that when you write,,, it will not end well my guy my pal try to name a shade of color instead of saying “pretty tan, she’s not a vampire but she’s not black” pls
  • I will say, the surprise shapeshifting talent threw me for a loop but it matches her character very well; can she make herself look however she wants? If someone makes a comment about her appearance is she able to change it immediately? Interesting things to think about
  • her “personality type” category is killer, I love it. I do get a Heathers vibe from her, very much so
  • she’s conservative JUST to make people mad? Or does she actually have valid opinions that don’t orbit around antagonizing people
  • her enemies are her friends, very interesting
  • the background is very good, I like how you mention that she still has a lot of that icy Queen Bee personality because that’s pretty realistic; she’s acted that way for so long there’s no way it can all just disappear that easily

Nice work! I hope this helped!

Rory

  • Yeah her character definitely reminded me of Heather Chandler ahaha
  • Haha okay I've changed it to "slightly sunkissed"
  • Yeah, she doesn't really have any strong political views but she literally just likes when people get offended.

Thanks very much! :)