forum Hiii! This is one of my main characters so please critique because I'm lonely
Started by @ElianaRose15
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@Azuresbend

Hi (it's me again) Man I gotta say I'm getting really into your story.
I like her, and her demeanor perfectly encapsulates, at least what I understand to be, the tone of your world.
Little things like her manisims and dispositions make her feel like a really well developed character even in short summary sentences. I like her back story and how twisted and gross it is, though I will ask who abducted her and why did they torture her instead of just short and sweet murder? personal or just a random act of cruelty? My other question was about her eye color (I mean I think oily green would be pretty great) but didn't you say something in your other post about how black bloods have black hair and eyes as well?
All and all she kinda reminds me of Victoria from the corpse bride, I mean more like because of her look and hobbies not the whole bloody murder part, and in my head at least your black blood world has simlaur sets to the bleak dark sets of that world contrasted against a bloody red sky. It all sounds pretty great.

@ElianaRose15

Never specified this before, but the only way a full-black blood can die is if they get injected with human blood. The black blood is supernatural and protects them from harm. Half-bloods can die from some other things but their blood still protects them. The human blood is not gifted to protect anything, so it destroys anything gifted in the black blood if injected. They often need pain to feel alive. Also, it is more common for a black blood to be born with dark or white hair and dark eyes, but it is not impossible to be born with other colored hair and eyes (Though it is considered wrong because black hair and eyes are ideal)

One of the feelings she could feel that the rest of her family couldn't was severe pain. Most Black Bloods feel no pain until they are killed. She was kidnapped by her father's subjects, as it was considered taboo to have a child outside of marriage and he didn't want her to shame the family name. They wanted her death to be slow and painful to one, shame her pregnancy; two, out her for feeling pain, and three, to get revenge because she was never a lady and liked being more masculine instead