forum hi! can you critique this guy for me?

Started March 12, 2020 by @sharkfinn_ey

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Isaac he's fairly new, so I'm still working on a lot of stuff
But I'd like a second pair of eyes to look at him :)

Hey, I took a look at him! Here's what I found:

Looks: You did a great job describing his looks; I had no problem visualizing him. The "what's in their bag" section was also really cool! Only suggestion here is to describe his skin tone a little more than just "white."
Nature: I would find some more serious flaws. You say earlier he has depression; how does that affect him? His relationship with his boyfriend? Does bottling up his emotions cause any problems? The Personality Type section is a good start, but you could elaborate a little more there.
Social: Oh, he's an anarchist! Maybe elaborate on this a little more? He's also LGBTQ+; does this affect his politics? Is he active in the movement?

I hope I didn't sound too critical; I really like Isaac! Best of luck with whatever story you're writing with him!

he seems like a total bad boy XD
Otherwise, he seems great!

I'll try critiquing him,

Ok, first off, maybe you should give him a last name. Moving onto looks, you did a good job giving detail but like Onnex said, describe his skin tone more than just white. Is it warm or cool? Does he tan often or is he prone to burns? His nature section is a good start but I think it needs more depth. While you did give him flaws, I think you should explain the flaws in his personality more in depth in that section. In his personality section, some of the traits you put in are more mannerisms or likes and dislikes than personality traits. You said he likes hugs but always asks if its okay. This shows me that he is polite which you could explain that aspect of his personality. I like that you split the personality section to good, neutral, and bad, it makes is easier to follow. His social section looks good just maybe explain his favorites and why they are his favorites. Also, explain his political views because they aren't the most common. I see that you didn't write much for his history. In that section, you should explain his backstory, his childhood, his story, etc. Also, you mentioned he goes to art school but you didn't put that in his history section. Overall, he's very likable and a solid start.