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@"That_Spunky_Little_Parakeet (In honor of my baby Marbles)"
Ae' Zahena
looks-
Explain her hair more, how long is it? what about when she's not working? what do you mean by "hair"?
are her stripes a specific color
That's legit all I have for her, I really like her and love how happy of a character she is! Its a nice change from the hard as nails protags we often see.

I legit have nothing to say about Ellen, I honestly already love her! shes a great character and already seems very realistic.

The allpowerful samwhich

@CoffeeShopNotebook I would try and add more unique traits. When designing these I like to think about their personal relationships with others and how they might shape some of their interests. You mentioned a pet named Nebula. I'm inferring that this pet is a dragon. If Nebula is a dragon that could fly maybe she enjoys cloud watching because it reminds her of her beloved dragon. Does she sometimes accidentally treat people the way she treats Nebula (not realizing she's petting someone's arm, using words she only uses with Nebula) The only other thing is her motivation. What do you mean by "making sure others aren't upset with her"? Is her main goal acceptance? Popularity? Is she afraid of making decisions because she doesn't want anyone to disagree with the one she made? Or because she's afraid that she'll make the wrong decision and hurt someone? Ivy is such a bean that needs to be protected. You've done a great job of creating a quiet lovable character without making her into a stereotypical shy girl. I'm excited to hear other parts of your story!

Gigi

@That_One_Lavender_Owl_that's_into_Sci-Fi In the box that says identifying marks, it means to also put in anything un-human-like, for example tails, horns, wings, etc. It would be nice to have more detail on Ae' Zahena's relationship with their family.

@Riorlyne pets

i'm very new to writing, so If you could give me your opinion on Vaj, I'd be super happy!

You need to set your character to 'public' for people to be able to view them. This can be done via the three-connected-dots button next to the red edit button on the character's page.

also, how do you start a discussion?

Navigate to the board you want to start a discussion in. You should see a text field right above the latest discussion thread that says "Start a new discussion". If you write something in that field it becomes the title of your thread, and a box drops down for you to write the first post in, along with a blue 'create new discussion' button when you're ready to submit.

@CoffeeShopNotebook

@CoffeeShopNotebook I would try and add more unique traits. When designing these I like to think about their personal relationships with others and how they might shape some of their interests. You mentioned a pet named Nebula. I'm inferring that this pet is a dragon. If Nebula is a dragon that could fly maybe she enjoys cloud watching because it reminds her of her beloved dragon. Does she sometimes accidentally treat people the way she treats Nebula (not realizing she's petting someone's arm, using words she only uses with Nebula) The only other thing is her motivation. What do you mean by "making sure others aren't upset with her"? Is her main goal acceptance? Popularity? Is she afraid of making decisions because she doesn't want anyone to disagree with the one she made? Or because she's afraid that she'll make the wrong decision and hurt someone? Ivy is such a bean that needs to be protected. You've done a great job of creating a quiet lovable character without making her into a stereotypical shy girl. I'm excited to hear other parts of your story!

When I say she doesn't want anyone to be upset with her I mean to say that she doesn't like to get into dramatic conversations. She doesn't want to give her opinion and then have someone disagree and treat her differently because they don't support the same ideas. She's afraid that because not everyone on her team lets things go as easily as she does then she has to keep things to herself to stay friends.
Thanks for the tips on Nebula too! Her dragon is some-what new to her but I'll keep your ideas in mind for when she gets more used to Nebula. I think that will add another layer of character relationship and depth.