forum Evaluate my character please
Started by @Alastor_Radio_Demon group
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Looks
-A Smilodon is a saber-tooth tiger, right? Maybe add here how tall he'd be on hind legs, because the difference between his weight and height really threw me off.
-I would recommend not leaving out the 'General Description' section, it helps when explaining the general vibe the character gives off, if that makes sense. Otherwise, everything looks good here!

Nature
-I'd elaborate more on the Flaws section. This is obviously an evil character, and you describe him as 'sadistic' in other places. Stuff like that should definitely go in Flaws.
-You describe him as 'charming' in Talents; maybe expand on this in Personality Type.
-What kind of magic does he possess?
-He has hobbies to calm himself down after an outburst. Why does he feel the need to calm himself? Does he feel guilty afterwards? Does he simply not like being angry?
-His Personality Type section is very bare! Even if it's already been said in other sections like Flaws, you should put it in here.
-You have a great start here, but I would elaborate more on why he acts the way he does, and how it affects others.

Social
-Politics: what does he like or dislike about the current way Pride Rock is ruled?
-He's a successful writer- does he hide his sadistic nature from others? It seems like if others knew of his true nature they wouldn't want to read his work.
-Background looks good!

I hope I didn't come across as too harsh; I think Clawface is a really interesting character! These are just suggestions, but hopefully you can gain something useful from them.