forum Does anybody want to critique my son- cOUGh- character?
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@Torpion language

Hey guys! This is my protagonist for a story I'm working on- I feel like he's a bit 2D, heheh…

Some basic background information that will (hopefully) clear up any confusion:

  1. The story takes place 200 years into the future, and all the countries on earth have united into a big-global nation called United Nations (I know theres already a United Nations, it's the same concept but different 😅) Most of the global problems have been solved, such as climate change and pollution.

  2. There's been a 'zombie apocalypse' going on for the past 36 years (really, really long story XD) The plague is called HC sometimes, and Hollows are basically zombies.

  3. My protagonist is a 'super soldier' called a GEU (Genetically Enhanced Unit). This means his genes were among the many DNA samples donated to the Armed Forces to make up the army. Instead of calling civilians to service, the government makes soldiers in mass-production labs and they edit their DNA to make them stronger, faster, healthier and have quick thinking. The civilians, in return, donate lil samples their DNA haha.

  4. The concept art in his gallery was done with the assistance of mochakingup.itch.io, except for the headshot depicting his mask (art creds to mua ahaha) Okay, that's the watered down version haha 😂 If you have any other questions, please let me know! Here's his link!

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You have a really solid charactor here , you explane everything to an extreme extent, honestly i cant find a single flaw, and i can see him in my mind even without the illistration. i have a small suggestion. go into depth about his battle suit thing, does he wear it all the time? if not what does he wear?

@Torpion language

You have a really solid charactor here , you explane everything to an extreme extent, honestly i cant find a single flaw, and i can see him in my mind even without the illistration. i have a small suggestion. go into depth about his battle suit thing, does he wear it all the time? if not what does he wear?

Oh, that's something I didn't even think of :0 Thank you very much, I'll get working on that!