forum Critiques? Ples?
Started by @Zandra2119
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@M.W.Poel

okay, so I wasn't sure if you actually wanted feedback on the characters or just on what we thought of them as a person. I just did both to make sure.

Thayer

  1. How long is his hair? Waist length?
  2. What is a small beard? like that ring thingy Tony stark has or do you mean a full beard but kept short?
  3. go a bit more into the fit and the slightly muscled bit. what kind of muscle?
  4. How does his flaw affect him and the world around it? that is what makes a flaw truly a flaw.

I'm guessing that for the physical things the simple answer is to just look at your gallery but I put it up there anyway because you can't just plop all the pictures in your story (I think). Eventually, you'll have to describe him and it will be easier if you figure out his generic description here.
There's not a lot for me to go on in the social bit, so I don't know what kind of person he is beyond that he seems sorta handsome? (going by the pictures)

Zinrie

  1. so…. platinum blonde? if you had to compare the colour to something, what would you choose?
  2. How skinny? Like freakishly I-can-see-your-skeleton-skinny or still-looks-somewhat-healthy-skinny?
  3. aww, no nature tab yet.

Physically a typical elf except for the length.

Evette

  1. Again, what kind of skinny?
  2. what kind of tail does she have? sturdy and horizontal like a dolphin? powerful and vertical like a shark? slender with a delicate fin like some goldfish have? (couldn't think of a better example) I want to know!
  3. Try to add more mannerisms
  4. Talk about how her motivations motivate her. Why does she have them (if there even is a reason, everyone wants adventure and fun) and how does she want to reach them? Maybe even how far she's willing to go.
  5. Same as with Thayer's flaws I guess.
  6. Doesn’t like pessimistic or lazy people is more of a result of the prejudice. Why doesn't she like them?
  7. what a cute talent. ^.^
  8. Whoohoo!!!! AXOLOTL!!!!

She's the most detailed of all three so I can say with a little more confidence that she seems like a really nice person. I could definitely bond over Axolotl's with her, although she could use more details.