If I may say, develop her personality a little bit more? She's sarcastic and closed-off, but there must be more to her. Is she a pessimist, because of her past, or an optimist because of her ambitions for the future and her hope to make her father proud? (Or a realist, aware of her conditions but vowing to make the best of it, within reason?) How long does it take, and what does it take, for her to warm up to a person? Is she easily angered, and if so what subjects/behaviors rile her up (politics, being told what to do, witnessing injustice, etc.)? Just a few questions to start off.