forum Critique or notes on my character?
Started by @constellations.
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@Celestial-B

Oooof i'll try!

Ok, so he is a bit underweight! The average 6'4 male should be somewhere between 185-230 lbs! Especially if he has muscles. You mentioned in his talents that he used to be an awesome quarterback, and one of his prejudices is that all football players are jerks. So is that one of the reason he doesn't play football anymore? Were the other players rude? Explain! :D Alright, interesting backstory. But a few questions I think you can elaborate more in there. Was his relationship with his parents always bad, or when did it start? Did he have any friends while he was home schooled and fighting cancer? Did he have a good relationship with his brother? Does he still currently live with his brother? Has he and his brother every spoken to their parents again? I think you get the idea lol. Anyways, he is a really good character and I think if you just fix these few things he'll be good to go!! Good luck and hope I helped!

@constellations.

Thank you so much! I wrote his back story in a bit of a rush, so I have somethings that I definitely need to fix (basically what you mentioned). I will work on that right now ^^