I'd like to see if anyone can look at my character and see what I'm missing, or what I can improve. I have a couple areas I know I'm struggling with but it'd be great to hear what everyone else thinks as well.
A little background on the world. For anyone who has played the games, the world is Thedas from Dragon Age. It's a fantasy land that believes in a religion about a woman who was chosen by "The Maker" to lead armies against evil, and some mages who tried to steal power from "The Golden City"(Heaven) and became monsters that plague the world as punishment. So now the world fears magic and locks mages in a tower to "train", watched by the Templar Order who have abilities to block magic and strike mages down. So without further ado:
https://www.notebook.ai/plan/characters/347557#!
If I have all the background straight in my head, I really like the way her circumstances seem to tie into her personality and how they've made her who she is-being taken from her family at an early age and being told her magic is a bad thing maybe contributing to a quietness. Along with the developed world and all the other characters to complement and build on her personality and growth, I like that there are specific characters you've mentioned. all I would say to improve would be, why does she stretch herself thin to care about others if she doesn't have a lot of friends, and how does she care about others in the place that she's in? Is there a reason First Enchanter Irving shows her favoritism? I did really like this character and how the world she's in seems to contribute to her personality.
Thank you, these are some good points. I hadn't thought much about how he caring nature might have developed. My overall goal includes 6 original characters of different backgrounds coming together to save Ferelden. I have most of them planned out, just need the little details like with Amafrey.
It sounds really cool, I hope it all works out for you!
