forum Critique on a character?

Started April 06, 2018 by Emily

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I would love some critique on my demon character I'm working on. I'm super excited for this one and I would love some feedback on what I have so far.

(check Notes section for the plot so far)

I like your character a lot! Here are some things that I suggest, though:

1. More traits under personality; maybe you haven't figured her out yet, and that's okay, but just know that a character can't have only 3 traits and still be well-rounded and likable.
2. Mannerisms; the things you put here could probably go under personality. Mannerisms are more like little quirks and such. Does she play with her hair when she's nervous? Bite her nails? Things like that make up mannerisms.
   Of course, a lot of this will come with time and character development.
   I read through your plot ideas, and I love the concepts behind it. It looks like a very interesting read, and I haven't seen anything quite like it before. Good luck with your story!