forum Critique needed please!

Started February 23, 2018 by @Lemons

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Elena Rosales Shes relatively new. The art is mine. Critiques would be appreciated! a few bits such as hobbies I'm still working on

I think it’s really good. Has alot of detail which is great.

Love the art, very unique! Over all a pretty well developed, realistic character, I just have a few questions :)

Who are these 'rogues,' exactly? Why was her grandmother accused of being one? Also, personality type refers to their general personality, eg. if they're shy, stubborn, artistic, well-read, calm, courageous, over-protective, etcetera. Maybe elaborate on the mannerisms a bit more, for example, does she meet people's eyes when they talk? Does she use her hands a lot to accompany her speech? Is she more nervous in front of certain people? Does she like to daydream, or is she very down-to-earth? What you've got there so far is really good, and adds depth to your character, but maybe consider adding a little bit more :)

About her power, do many people in your universe have powers? Does she keep it a secret? I love Stitch, by the way! Very cute :3

Overall a very deep, developed character, I love what you've done with her!

@TopazWyrmlet~ Ah, thank you so much!!! And yeah, sorry! forgot to mention that. In Elena's world, everyone has some kind of powers such as hers! Though they differ in terms of what the powers are (such as invisibility, telepathy, the elements etc). Rouges are people whos powers have gone bad and have become dangerous. It works like mental illnesses, but the government in her world feels that the way to stop it is by isolating and performing tests on them. Her grandmother always struggled with this, but her boyfriend/husband (Elena's grandfather) helped her conceal it for quite some time. Containing your powers is very hard to do, however, and her grandmother was eventually found to be a rouge and was taken away.
Ill do the stuff you suggested! thank you so much :)

Happy to help, I just took a look at your universe too, it's so interesting! I've never seen anything like what you're doing, keep writing!

She's amazing!!!! I seriously love her. My only advice would be to elaborate on that backstory a little. Just add more detail and flesh it out a little more. Great job.